#1
this songs has alot of work to be done on it,but i cant think of any way to improve it at the moment. so any tips would be greatly apreciated


verse 1

its your main mistake
to throw your cards down
when you know your beat
yet you refuse to fold

yeah your sitting there
everythings a blur
your teeth are lose
and your bodies sore

all of this is chaos
and you cant remember where you are
yeah youve lost your battle
but you push on the war

chorus

its knowing your limits
and refusing to back down
your the kid in the crowd
that wants the glory
and the taste of the blood
hear comes the grayscale
you'd stand if you could


yeah, thats all i got so far
i just started writing songs so this is probably pretty bad
#2
Interesting, quite like it for some reason.
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#4
I'd say pretty good... I have a friend who showed me something she wrote about moshing... but her stuff just sounds like pretencious crap like she thinks she's better than other people who don't mosh.