Can some people give me feedback on a song I've just finished? Please bear in mind this is meant to be a prog type song and this is my FIRST EVER song.

here's what I've written so far....

(2nd verse)
You are given the golden triumph
A crown of gold upon your head
A song like the bird in the cage

(4th verse)
The masks of the actors hang upon the wall
Silent, unmoving, an unholy facade
A stage where all ends in tragedy
A bloody sacrifice for all your hidden sins

Even I don't know what this song is about.....
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Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.