Please tell me your honest opinions on my first ever song. It's a prog rock/metal song....even I don't know what it's about. Please bear in mind it's my FIRST song.

(2nd verse)
You are given the golden triumph
A crown of gold upon your head
A song like the bird in the cage

(4th verse)
The masks of the actors hang upon the wall
Silent, unmoving, an unholy facade
A stage where all ends in tragedy
A bloody sacrifice for all your hidden sins