#1
ok im thinking it starts slow and progressivly gets louder and faster, and the chorus at the end would be more yelled or screamed than sang.... any suggestions would be great though, thats just my idea


I can’t get you out of my head

You’re always on my mind

The only reason I smile

The only one who brings me joy…


With out you the sorrow consumes me

The anger surrounds me

The darkness burns my empty soul

But when I see you…


You’re eyes burn right through me

The darkness around me is broken

My whole world is perfect,

Until you leave…


I can’t get you out of my head

You’re always on my mind

The only reason I smile

The only one who brings me joy…


I am always with you

Even when you don’t see me

Silently begging for your attention

But I never get it…


I know you don’t love me

get the out of my head!

You don’t even know me

get out of my head!!

I know you’re not mine

get the out of my head!!!

You must love to torture

Because you won’t get out of my HEAD!!!
#2
I just read it and sang it in my mind. Looking good so far. My only suggestion is that you should work on your syllable count a bit more (unless I'm "hearing" it wrong) because one line is half the syllables than the one before it and it just completely ****s up the singing (unless you'll be ringing out some words more than others).

It seems to work pretty well in the progressive sound/speed too.
#3
yeah, im can probly work that a bit. but im not the one singing it thanks for the suggestions, and ill bring that up with my singer and see wat he thinks on that... but thanks man
#5
i like it, i can picture the lyrics getting kinda ripped and tortured there at the end. also to me it had a nice bouncy flow to it.
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