#2
ill write as i listen.
good solid guitar playing here, i like the melody line by the second guitar.
for a guy you have a pretty voice (durr, that came out kinda gay, but you know what i mean)
great lyrics. i would recomend doubling up the rhythm guitar, to fill out the sound a bit, have a bit more punch.
vocally, you are lightyears ahead of me, a few parts where you go a little off tone, but overall you are right on.
do you just play acoustic? try and find a bassist friend, that would be great for this song.
this sounds like a finished product, something that might come on the radio (well if radio was any good that is )
your other songs sound great as well, some good vocal harmonizing on ray of hope, maybe try that on your new one?

anyways, here is my new one if you dont mind taking a look.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=830064
if you arent really into that style of music, feel free to check out the fingerstyle song Blueberry in my sig.

thanks!
#3
Sounds great, might bring up the single notes on the guitar a little bit (Make them louder) Fill out the tone a little, but your singing is amazing.
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So we had a music battle, copying what each other did and upping the ante and whatnot. After awhile of going nowhere, I said to the pianist "let's see you do this, asshole" played a single note... and bent it up a step. And left.
#5
I like the lead guitar part, created the right emotion I think.
Your voice starts off a bit too weak, but then levels out a bit.
I like your voice, it's very soothing, but you need to watch some of the notes, some of them go a bit off. Generally good though.

Its a nice mellow song, I like it. I think a little bit more variation would be good though, to stop it going stale, but yeah... you've got all this to improve upon on your next recording.

Nice one man.

Crit mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=832248