#1
Song my band member wrote... just looking for some tips or suggestions thanks in advance

Rocking and rolling all night long
Rocking it hard cause its hard as a rock
Playing it loud playing it fast
Keeping the rhythm like a pendulum clock

Rocking through the entire night
Till she was beggin’ for an encore
I rock hardest at a one person show
And I leave ‘em chanting more more more

We were rocking the house
And rolling over the floor
I help her hit the high notes
And she’s all I’ve been working for

Rocking through the entire night
Till she was beggin’ for an encore
I only play a one person show
And I leave ‘em chanting more more more

The show was over
Sweat pouring off my face
We’d had the volume up to 11
So bad the cops came to her place

they busted thru that door
and escourted me to jail
ill give her that encore
while im rockin in hell
#2
Quote by jtmj121
Song my band member wrote... just looking for some tips or suggestions thanks in advance

Rocking and rolling all night long
Rocking it hard cause its hard as a rock
Playing it loud playing it fast
Keeping the rhythm like a pendulum clock

Rocking through the entire night
Till she was beggin’ for an encore
I rock hardest at a one person show
And I leave ‘em chanting more more more
Typical "ROCKnROLL" chorus was achieved. A helpful tip though, try and not use the word 'rock' and 'rocking' in every line and stanza. It really waters down the song to be boring and repetitious.

We were rocking the house
And rolling over the floor
I help her hit the high notes
And she’s all I’ve been working for
This is the best stanza in my opinion. It provides you with an mental image and situation. You can keep the rocking and rolling in this stanza.

Rocking through the entire night
Till she was beggin’ for an encore
I only play a one person show
And I leave ‘em chanting more more more

The show was over
Sweat pouring off my face
We had the volume up to 11
Was so bad the cops came to her place
We'd needed to change to We for proper verb tense. And Your last line didn't make sense. You needed a verb.

they busted through that door
and escorted me to jail
Ill give her that encore
while im rockin in hell
Minor spelling errors.


Overall its an average RocknRoll song. You could make it work if you put in a catchy guitar lick and some good instrumentation.