#1
Hi all, tell me what you think? (C4C)


It’s the end…(the atmosphere apprehends)

Anthropogenic global warming.
The Atmosphere declares war,
On a confused Earth.
Maybe its from all the spinning?
We don't care, we’re not getting dizzy
Leave you chargers in the plugs,
its not us that’s going to drown.
Some ignores it, some fight alone
With twisted cockeyed ideas.
The battered beauty… betrayed.

The planet and his best friend, Atmosphere,
Doomed by our relentless damage.
Ferocious mumbles
#2
The content seems kinda trite and sophomoric in comparison with the issue you're trying to address. Kinda like a 5 year old's rendition on shakespear.

No that wasn't an insult, just trying to decide how to exemplify what I was trying to say.
Do you feel warm within your cage?

And have you figured out yet -


Life goes by?
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It's you
#3
Anthropogenic global warming.
The Atmosphere declares war,
On a confused Earth.
Maybe its from all the spinning?
We don't care, we’re not getting dizzy
Leave you chargers in the plugs, i think you mean 'your' instead of you here
its not us that’s going to drown.
Some ignores it, some fight alone I would say 'some ignore it', unless that s was a typo
With twisted cockeyed ideas.
The battered beauty… betrayed.

The planet and his best friend, Atmosphere,
Doomed by our relentless damage.

apart from the few things that i have mention, i find it a very good piece.
#4
im no good at critting, but here it goes...

i think its good, expresses the point youre trying to make very well and expresses how poeple really dont pay much atttention and dont really care about the earth