#1
Read the message clear as the writing on the wall
Can't ignore it or humanity will fall
See the people run as the mist begins to rise
See the Panic, read the terror in their eyes

Can't escape the terror
Caused by the man downstairs himself
Can't escape the terror
Now the Earth's a living hell
And no matter how far that you run you just can't seem to hide
Cuz this time ain't gonna be no changing of the tides
Can't escape the terror

See the sun crashing and burning from the sky
See no more can't bare to open up my eyes
Hear the people scream as the walls fall to the ground
Try as hard as you want but you can't escape the sound

Can't escape the terror
Caused by the man downstairs himself
Can't escape the terror
Now the Earth's a living hell
And no matter how far that you run you just can't seem to hide
Cuz this time ain't gonna be no changing of the tides
Can't escape the terror

And now the time has
For us to rise
Instead of terror there is fire in our eyes
And now the time has
For us to rise
That cocky bastard's in for one hell of a suprise

Can't escape the terror
Caused by the man downstairs himself
Can't escape the terror
Now the Earth's a living hell
And no matter how far that you run you just can't seem to hide
Cuz this time ain't gonna be no changing of the tides

Can't escape the terror
Caused by the man downstairs himself
Can't escape the terror
Now the Earth's a living hell
And no matter how far that you run you just can't seem to hide
Cuz this time ain't gonna be no changing of the tides
Can't escape the terror

Can't escape the terror
Can't escape the terror
Can't escape the terror
Hedgehogs go mooo
#2
very good. The only part i had a problem with was 'Caused by the man downstairs himself' as it didn't flow with the rest of the piece
#4
other than the fact that you copied the title of an awesome KMFDM song, i think this is good.

one suggestion, for the second line:

See the sun crashing and burning from the sky
See no more can't bare to open up my eyes

See the sun crashing and burning from the sky
Try to look, but I'm afraid to open up my eyes


It flows more that way
#5
Quote by deceiveroffools
very good. The only part i had a problem with was 'Caused by the man downstairs himself' as it didn't flow with the rest of the piece


It flowed perfectly! What are you talking about!

I am a very christian man and this gave me an image that was brought to my attention when reading revalation or the way the world will end and it will be just like this in my oppinion GREAT JOB
#6
that was the point. it was kind of about the end of the world...kind of anyway....wrote it while jacked up on vicodine during one of my many injuries lol
Hedgehogs go mooo