Thanks a lot, she said
those boys you introduced me to
reminded me a lot of you
she said

It's getting to that time of year,
Where days grow longer
And i grow fonder
Trying to fight these images of you

And the summer sunset
set the bar so high
That the times that passed from then
werent quite as right
Because its not the things you said
When you left that day,
Its how you slammed the door upon exiting,
and knocked our picture out of frame

But it seems that everytime Im passing through
You only care about the things that I can get for you
And the tides around the shores erode the sands
And our footprints washed

Last edited by Smoothrider_41 at Apr 14, 2008,
this is cool. not too long, not too straightforward but not too poetic. everythings just right.
the only thing is it says glow; did you mean grow maybe? anyway its good either way. i wish i could give you a longer crit but i cant think of anything other to say other than i liked it alot.

Emerse your soul in love

You used to be alright What happened?

Yellow tigers crouched in jungles in her Dark Eyes .