#2
work on your vibrato
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#3
love 1:39

c'est magnifique.

yh but really it's a good song. you just need to practice it a bit more, the harmonics at the end were a bit muted. your changes from section to section were just a bit sloppy.
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#4
are u playing a squier? otherwise something just doesn't sound to great... either pickups or amp. other than that its good, but as they said transitions were a little sloppy and try and eliminate some of the repetition make it sound less like an exercise and more like a song. Well done though keep working on it and practicing.

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#6
The one major thing I noticed was the type of vibrato you're using: you were using the classical side-to-side vibrato as opposed to the less subtle rock up-and-down vibrato; you might want to try working on that.
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