#1
Hey every1 please tell me how you like this song. I wrote this because i have to move and there's a girl i'm leaving that i'm really really in love with. I wanna show her but i don't want her to think it stupid. Tell me what you think:

Saying Goodbye To Brown Eyes
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as i look you deep in your eyes
dreading this as i prepare to say goodbye
for so long i've been in love with you
you were the only thing that pulled me through
i don't know how i am going to live
without the daily joy in my life you give
i don't know why it has to end this way
knowing i shall suffer for the rest of my days

now my dreams have faded
as my heart crumbles to the ground
i am dead on the inside
my mind is empty i'll make no sound

being forced to say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
bringing so much pain with every word
no choice but to say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
wish these dreadful things couldn't be heard

wish now i could hold you so close
as the pain seems to hurt the most
wishing i would never have to let go
but good things can't last forever we all know
thinking about the past times we've had
thinking about them now makes me so sad
remembering when i first held your precious hands
a time so good now i think of it i can barley stand

now my dreams have faded
as my heart crumbles to the ground
i am dead on the inside
my mind is empty i'll make no sound

being forced to say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
bringing so much pain with every word
no choice but to say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
wish these dreadful things couldn't be heard

now there's nothing left for me
nothing good that i can see
i am all alone because of my deeds
the signs and warnings i wouldn't heed
feeling my heart's empty abyss
space to be filled from the perfect kiss
now that i've lost you
nothing i can ever change or do
because of myself i am all alone
no place to sit and call home
there is nothing that will please me
nothing in this world that will set me free

even though we are apart
you can still bring life to my heart
i've gone and ****ed up again
trapped from these neverending sins
please forgive me my love
for you are now as free as a dove
you do not need me to get through
for there are others much worthy for you
i know that this is suicide to my soul
without you my demons will take toll
but if it means setting you free from pain
then my love for you i shall refrain

as i whisper the words goodbye to you
i know you feel the deep pain too
i'm sorry it has to end this way
but for both our sakes i cannot stay
you look down as tears fall from your eyes
hating myself as i have made my angel cry
holding your hands for the very last time
feeling this awful pain of yours and mine

now my dreams are broken
as my heart tears to the ground
my mind is dead on the inside
my soul is bleeding i'll make no sound

being forced to say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
bringing so much pain with every word
no choice but to say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
wish these dreadful things couldn't be heard

just don't wanna say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
feeling so much heartache with every breath
just cannot say goodbye
to those beautiful brown eyes
seems that the only way to escape is death
#2
just gotta say this song is enspiring me to write a song myself it really got the butterflies going cuz im in the same situation as you. i see how deep songwriting can be im gonna have a go for myself. thanks alot dont change anything
#3
I really liked it. It's quite melancholy. So, are you in a relationship that you have to end then? How far are you moving from her, because if it isn't too far, it doesn't need to end.

Touching on whether or not she'd like it...Of course she will. You took the time and poured your heart into it, and she'll realize that.

I hope all goes well. At least you can keep in touch with her, so be thankful.

Good job, mate.