#1
I have these cigarettes
And a cocaine nose job
I wipe my eyes
And feel no pain

I have a headache
But no medicine around me
I fill it up
And release the pain

You've got your hands around me
Your starting to drown me
I open up
Can't say hello

This feeling comes upon me
There starting to surround me
I open up
Can't let go

These needles start to pierce me
This pain over whelms me
I'm cracking up
Can't wake up

You've got your hands around me
Your starting to drown me
I open up
Can't say hello

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#2
Hmm, it's kind of standard.

Although, I liked line 2: "a cocaine nose job", that was funny.

I say if you can rework this to make some of the other lines use the concept you used in line 2.

I still like it though, but it would be even better if you tried to do what I suggested.

If you could, maybe leave a small comment on "Things". I'll put it in my sig.