#1
This is my first song posted on here in a while. This song is metal.


Verse One

I feel the charge
Of lithium coursing through my veins
Death at large
Lithium’s driving me insane

Verse Two

I sense the shock
Of lithium frying my brains
I watch the clock
Lithium’s driving me insane

Chorus

I fry
Why can’t I die?
I cry
Why can’t I die?
I sigh
I just can’t die
Lithium
Lithium

Bridge One

It’s all becoming clear now
Devil take your bow
I am destined to suffer
For now and forever

Chorus

I fry
Why can’t I die?
I cry
Why can’t I die?
I sigh
I just can’t die

Verse Three

I grasp the voltage
Of lithium numbing pain
Electrical shock montage
Lithium’s driving me insane

Chorus

I fry
Why can’t I die?
I cry
Why can’t I die?
I sigh
I just can’t die

Bridge Two

Feel the charge
Sense the shock
Grasp the voltage
Tightening grip
My life’s about to slip

Outro

I fry
I’m about to die
I cry
I’m about to die
I sigh
It’s time to die
Lithium
Lithium
Lithium
#2
if you're going to revise, i'd probably start off by renaming the song....

i can think of several songs called "Lithium" right off the bat.
#4
Quote by ottoavist
if you're going to revise, i'd probably start off by renaming the song....

i can think of several songs called "Lithium" right off the bat.

+1 i was thinking of the Nirvana or evanessence one when i read the title =/
I breathe air.
#5
Well, I called it Lithium because I saw a commercial for duracel. Plus Lithium is my favorite element on the periodic table.
Also, I was only aware of Nirvana's Lithium.
Any suggestions on what to rename it?
#7
You could call the song 'Immortal' with reference to the 'Why can't I die?' and 'I just can't die' lines in the chorus
Although there are some songs already called 'Immortal' that are out, it's a wider-reaching song title than 'Lithium'
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#8
Thanks for the feed back. Yes, I do have a favorite element, Im a nerd. I might possibly change the name, however I would have to find a word that replaces Lithium in the song.

So can I have some feedback on the lyrics?
#10
Quote by Guitargod12345
It seems like something like Damage Inc. or Battery by Metallica

And thats a good thing right? I know it is for me. Metallica is probably my biggest influence.
#11
these lyrics are boring and predictable. (no offense)

you have some good ideas, but keep working at it...

#12
you know, i like the verses, particularly the line "electrical shock montage" which is very original i think, and you have a lot of potential throughout the song. but the chorus is to repetitive, and so rhymy. try adding some more hard hitting lines after "why cant i die" instead of just sigh, cry, fry. far to easy.

C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=890884
#14
Is it about a battery?
anyways, I like it, good job. =)
You could just use the periodic table abbreviation, maybe, as a title, also.