#1
This is the first song my daughter has tried to write.
She is 13 and has just started her band.
She does not know that i have posted it here and will probably kill me when she finds out.What do you guys think?


The Only Way To Get Away From Yourself Is To Let Go
[verse 1]
Lifes not fair
thats what everybody says to her
deal with it
theyre kids just how hard can it be
[pre chorus]
the amount of lies shes told
the stories getting old
her individualities been sold
[chorus]
and noone sees how hard shes trying
they all know that shes been lying
she wants the one thing that she cant have
and the harder she tries(harder she tries)
the harder it is for her to go on
[verse 2]
wakes up in the morning,looks in the mirror
she hates what she sees
so she hides it under all the makeup
and noone knows the real her
[pre chorus]
now her fates been told
her lifes getting old
her selfrespects been sold
[chorus]
and noone sees how hard shes trying
they all know that shes been lying
she wants the one thing that she cant have
and the harder she tries(harder she tries)
the harder it is for her to go on
[verse 3]
all the boys at school
all the vain concieted girls
who never saw the real her
who led to her demise
[pre chorus]
all the lies shes told
all the pains getting old
and now
shes letting go
[final chorus]
and noone sees how hard shes trying
they all know that shes been lying
she gave up on what she couldnt have
and now she cant go on(now she cant go on
all the lies and the pain
have they all been in vain
her pale white hands streaked with blood
as she lets go
#2
does the idea of suicide (or murder i suppose), seen in the last lines, not bother you slightly? apart from that, sounds quite good for a first song...a lot better than many of mine now...
#3
bit "emo" but the basic structure is there and pretty good for 13yr old.
is the rest of the music good?

my only worry would be who is she basing the story on?
but i suppose the me against the world turmoil of a teenage angst could just be shining through
#4
My daughter is emo,and the song is based on the girls at her school who plaster make up on and look quite orange ,in her words, to hide their true selfs behind their makeup.
The rest of their stuff is actually quite good,but then again i would say that.
When they start to record things i'll put a link up here so you guys can here what they sound like