#1
Close your eyes and don’t say a word
Kiss my lips and don’t think of her
Let your self love me no one will ever know
And once you see it’s true
You’ll know how much I love you
If only you would give me a chance

Come away with me
Let me ease the pain
Let me show you the way to be free
If only you could see your self here with me

I know it’s hard for you
You’ve been holding on for so long
But that pain inside you
That still makes you cry at night
It’ll be there as long as your next to her

Come away with me
Let me ease the pain
Let me show you the way to be free
If only you could see your self here with me


its my first time posting a song I hope it works well.
#2
Quote by cosmic_wave
Close your eyes and don’t say a word
Kiss my lips and don’t think of her
Let your self love me no one will ever know
And once you see it’s true
You’ll know how much I love you
If only you would give me a chance

very strong begining i like it!

Come away with me
Let me ease the pain
Let me show you the way to be free
If only you could see your self here with me

good chorus that last line seems long and hard to fit into a song tho? maybe idk

I know it’s hard for you
You’ve been holding on for so long
But that pain inside you
That still makes you cry at night
It’ll be there as long as your next to her

also very strong stanza i like it!

Come away with me
Let me ease the pain
Let me show you the way to be free
If only you could see your self here with me


its my first time posting a song I hope it works well.



its really good dude i would suggest making it longer if its a song, add atleast 2 more stanzas its pretty vague but yet very describbing. hard to explain.

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#3
If I get called dude or man again I'm... ok not much I can do there. thanks though. K I'll look