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So I've been working on getting the first original piece for my band and I've been throwing around quite a few things. The following is a song written about characters that I just made up off the top of my head

The tune that I am imagining is medium distortion, melodic instrumentals with a driving vocal track that keeps the energy up

tempo somewhere between 140-160 so upbeat post punk-ish sound with some modern rock and punk accentuations

(screamed)
The air was frigid as you screamed out to me
“my ‘love’ is fake! I could never be into you!”
You closed the door leaving me out to freeze
A downtrodden man with nothing but the truth

(sung)
So I’ll go away,
Escape from the pain and the life I once had
Go away,
Away till I know how to get inside your head

(scream)
It was only YOU that could set my heart on fire
It was YOUR leading on that made me wild
To see you, to touch you, the thought grasped my mind!
I won’t forget what you’ve done, for making me pine

(sung)
But still I’ll go away,
Escape from the pain and the life I once had
Go away,
Away till I know how to get inside your head


Any criticisms are welcome and I will do my best to do the same for you
"There was a time you let me know
What's real and going on below
But now you never show it to me, do you?
And remember when I moved in you
The holy dove was moving too
And every breath we drew was Hallelujah"
-Leonard Cohen