#1
this is mostly a poem..

I thought that i could count on you
to always be yourself
But now I see that youve moved on,
youre just like everybody else

We never talk anymore,
we've drifted away
what we once had,
i doubt will ever be the same

But the one person
who i know will always be himself,
has moved away
our friendships been put up on a dusty shelf

If he came back
we could pick up right where we left
Lift our friendship off that shelf
i would no longer be bereft

things would be just like they used to
when life was still worth living
and we would just run right through
#2
Quote by xByxBlood+Tears
this is mostly a poem..

I thought that i could count on you
to always be yourself
But now I see that youve moved on,
youre just like everybody else

i really like this that rhyme didnt feel forced at all

We never talk anymore,
we've drifted away
what we once had,
i doubt will ever be the same

very good also didnt seem forced very natural

But the one person
who i know will always be himself,
has moved away
our friendships been put up on a dusty shelf

im confused on this part are you talking of the same person or some1 else?

If he came back
we could pick up right where we left
Lift our friendship off that shelf
i would no longer be bereft

still confused on that part and i have no idea what bereft means but that could just be my stupidity

things would be just like they used to
when life was still worth living
and we would just run right through

i like that you dont end with 4 lines it leaves some room for an outro if you make it into a song thats a good idea i should try that. thanks!



crit mine please? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=839286