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in a country-type mood.
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the helicopter hit the pad
the mother, the children, without the grandad
they climbed into the van
piled it high with their things
this may be the last of him they'll see
so, before you leave

baby, don't cry if i die tonight
don't cry, i've led a good life
keep your head up, hold your momma tight
baby, don't cry if i die tonight


they met him at the door
he smiled, and said, " i love you, girls"
they broke down and cried
they fell apart inside
daddy was a tough man
they'd never seen him cry
they sat down in a room
the doctor gave the news
he'll be fine
keep him company, he'll be daddy again
in no time

so, before i leave, one last thing..


thanks for everything
#2
Quote by NICKOLASrox
in a country-type mood.
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the helicopter hit the pad
the mother, the children, without the grandad
they climbed into the van
piled it high with their things
this may be the last of him they'll see
so, before you leave

Great opening! It has plenty of momentum and flies along quite well. I really like the opening rhyme. made me laugh for some reason, maybe coz I've had a drink.

baby, don't cry if i die tonight
don't cry, i've led a good life
keep your head up, hold your momma tight
baby, don't cry if i die tonight

Excellent chorus (I assume its the chorus...) as I said for the first verse, it has a lot of momentum. I'm just loving the vibes I'm getting from this. It's quite a sad theme, but the song itself comes across to me as not so sad.

they met him at the door
he smiled, and said, " i love you, girls"
they broke down and cried
they fell apart inside
daddy was a tough man
they'd never seen him cry
they sat down in a room
the doctor gave the news
he'll be fine
keep him company, he'll be daddy again
in no time

so, before i leave, one last thing..

Strong ending, after the last line you're going to put a solo or something? please say yes haha.
thanks for everything


I like this song overall, It has a very good feel to it. Well done.
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