This is something I've just started work on and I could really use some input on it. Right now it's kind of like Black Sabbath meets Mars Volta, or at lest thats what I was going for.
doom riff.zip
there are some ideas with great potential, but to me it just feels like most parts are just chucked in and makes it feel to cluttered through the intro,

The rhodes piano part is a good section i like that part, but for the lead parts they just appear really out of no where,

Like i said good work the ideas are great and u can work on them to make something good

But just work on building up on things

Good job