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New to writing, would appreciate any and all critique.

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Put me in a box, triple check the locks
I would see the world, I would see the pain
You dont want me to go insane

Bow down to the dead, let them inside your head
We are all but sheep, we have been led astray
What good is thinking anyway?

Easy does it, let them drop
We would all get wet were they to make a splash
And the waters so damn cold

Easy does it, let them drop
The world would eat them, even cause a change
It would suck them down to skin and bones

What if theres life beyond, a stream connects this pond
To an ocean full of opportunity?
I could search for the real me

When we finally meet I'll work to defeat
The kinks you brainwashed into me
I cant wait to be free