#1
hey whats up everyone, i felt like recording this to see what i need to do to improve. i had lyrics to it, but it was about my girlfriend who is now my ex, so i'm probably gonna rewrite the entire thing. i know the intro is way too fast for everything else but meh, you get it. lmk what you guys think and crit for crit. thanks

http://media.putfile.com/slowish-song
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#2
sounds pretty good man but yea it definately needs some lyrics. It has a pretty sad overall feel to it so I would suggest going in that direction with the lyrics. Are you going to put a lead anywhere in it? I know the whole song is clean but you chould still put a pretty cool lead in somewhere maybe even an acoustic lead. Just to spice it up a little. Overall, a very good start. Let me know when you get more added to it and I will listen again.

Thanks for critting mine btw! Much appreciated.
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#3
link for yours man?
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Quote by rockybo
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#4
Like the structure, just make sure when you do put new vocals in that they have a really good melody to them. Could make for a great song.

Would appreciate crit on mine, Wont Take Him Long, have a thread a couple posts above.