#1
This is your trench, please be comfortable
and do not spin on the chairs.
The I.T general will be with you shortly
so for your safety here is a blunt pencil.
enemy I.M. overhead may cause embarassment.

Intelligence suggests fatality rate: high.
Manners. Sense. Respect and honesty.
Please load Weapons XP and spreadsheet your fire.
The Campaign for Coffee Machine begins at 1.
Prepare donuts for going over the top.

Desktop soldier, may god be with you.
Too much gain = Ears in pain
Last edited by Nic Play Guitar at Apr 18, 2008,
#5
This is your trench, please be comfortable
I like the first line, I like the way your likening a war trench to an office chair
and do not spin on the chairs.
I think the 'on the chairs' ruins the imagery of the first line
The I.T general will be with you shortly
'I.T general' is quite witty
so for your safety here is a blunt pencil.
I like the idea, but i think saying 'blunt' is overstating your point
enemy I.M. overhead may cause embarassment.
This doesn't mean anything to me, might do to you though

Intelligence suggests fatality rate: high
Manners. Sense. Respect and honesty
Please load Weapons XP and spreadsheet your fire.
^^ I like these lines
The Campaign for Coffee Machine begins at 1.
Prepare donuts for going over the top.
^^ I don't like these lines

Desktop soldier, may god be with you.
A good ending

I like the combination of computer and army lingo together.
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