#1
Verse 1:

Blood sucking parasite,
That creeps through the night,
Draining the blood of the innocent,
Before the morning light,
Exits from the shadows
With a view to a kill,
Making others more like it,
Against their will.

Verse 2:

Everytime it calls, your hypnotized
Entranced by the glare in it's eyes,
Feels as though it is oh so right,
You think you're on the road to paradise,
But whatever it says, do not listen,
It's nothing but lies, it wants your life,
Taking your life is it's mission.

Chorus

Don't fall for the trap,
Fight against this beast with all you have,
And while it slumbers,
Take that stake and hammer,
And with your powerful force,
Drive it into the creatures heart,
It will scream, turn to dust,
Then fall apart.

Verse 3:

My vampire of love,
I will let you drain my heart,
I will not push us apart,
Even though it hurts and the pain drives me,
Round the bend,
To fall in love is always worth it,
In the end!
#2
i cant properly critique it because im not gay but it seems good to me

8.7/11

pluses (+)
+ vampires are cool
+ blood sucking parasites are pretty cool too

minuses (-)
- love is gay

You should change vampires to 'elton john', then it will work better i think
#3
well...i certainly dn't tink its gay...hmmm...because...i ain't gay either and i wrote this...ur entitled to ur opinion.....but lets jst say ur way off the beat dude! nuf said.

neways the rating u gave it iz decent...cheers..
Last edited by Tommy_D at Apr 19, 2008,
#4
9/10
I liked it upto the 3rd verse, just let the title speak about love, nd dont mention it again, it'll relate to more ppl
but i like everything else ;o
#5
Verse 1:

Blood sucking parasite,
That creeps through the night,
I liked the opening
Draining the blood of the innocent,
It's alright but blood of the innocent is so cliche
Before the morning light,
Exits from the shadows
With a view to a kill,
Making others more like it,
Against their will
Rest is good

Verse 2:

Everytime it calls, your hypnotized
Entranced by the glare in it's eyes,
Feels as though it is oh so right,
You think you're on the road to paradise,
But whatever it says, do not listen,
It's nothing but lies, it wants your life,
Taking your life is it's mission.
Second Verse is all good

Chorus

Don't fall for the trap,
Fight against this beast with all you have,
And while it slumbers,
Take that stake and hammer,
And with your powerful force,
Drive it into the creatures heart,
It will scream, turn to dust,
Then fall apart.
As is the chorus

Verse 3:

My vampire of love,
I will let you drain my heart,
I will not push us apart,
i find apart and heart quite a cheesy rhyme, fine apart from that
Even though it hurts and the pain drives me,
Round the bend,
To fall in love is always worth it,
In the end!
Decent ending

I'd say it's 7/10 atm
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