this is just the start of a song that im working on...im not too sure about it myself and i was wondering if i should carry it on or not

She cries "lord dont bring me down,
cause i'll need help to get back up"

A broken home, a broken leg,
Does it make any difference?

She pleads "lord no not today,
i'll find your money when i find a way"

But she's kidding herself,
cause these track marks dont come cheap,
she's not the innocent girl she was,
she's not the woman she thought she'd be

you'd be surprised,
but if you look in her eyes,
you'll see a f*cked up, desperate junkie

And thats about it for now i hope you can give me some constructive criticism. it would be greatly appreciated. thanks
Last edited by God_in_a_bag at Apr 21, 2008,