#1
Hey Guys, if possible could you check out these lyrics that I wrote and give some constructive criticism? That would be awesome. If you have any ideas for the rest of the song that would be great! Thanks! I'm shooting for a Indie/rock song here.

Verse 1
We’re not the victims when were the ones at fault
Losing ourselves just to find who we are
Tired of running in place
The only problems are ones we create

Verse 2
Keeping distance from your mind
You’re never wrong and always right
Waking up to a new beginning
All while you re still repairing
Gear:

Guitars
Martin DSR
Taylor 214e
Fender Strat
Epiphone 335 Dot
Carlo Robelli Acoustic

Amps+Effects
1978 Fender Pro Reverb
Boss Blues Driver
Boss Super Overdrive
EHX Holy Grail
Boss DD-20 Giga Delay
#2
Please chek out the rules of each of the forums in S+L and repost this in the correct forum (main S+L one, with the correct title.

Thanks.

Reported for closing/moving.
#3
i think the whole concept of the song its too repetitive. I also think its a bit a cliche. i dont want to sound harsh or anything, i just dont find this songwriting too fresh.