#1
Comments/suggestions welcome


Can't seem to find the words I wanna say to you
I Can't seem to find a way for them to break through
Yeah they couldn't be anymore from my heart
Every time I try I end up right back where I start
You never see what this does to me
Yeah you never see, you'll never see

I'm tired of all the things we say
And I'm tired of the games we play
Yeah I'm tired of all my hate
Can't take all this and I can't concentrate
I can't get my mind off of you
Tired of wondering what to do

Can't seem to find the words I wanna say to you
I Can't seem to find a way for them to break through
Yeah they couldn't be anymore from my heart
Every time I try I end up right back where I start
You never see what this does to me
Yeah you never see, you'll never see

I can't put up with all the fear
Of wondering what happens, when you're not here
Love that you want a me and you
Can't stand that you love him too
Yeah, is tonight the one
Are you really done, cause

I Can't seem to find the words I wanna say to you
Can't seem to find a way for them to break through
Yeah they couldn't be anymore from my heart
Every time I try I end up right back where I start
You never see what this does to me
Yeah you never see
Oh no, you'll never see
#2
I like them (I could really visualize what you were saying with the lyrics) but remember, every line doesn't have to rhyme with the last. Mix it up a little, don't always go for the AABB rhyme scheme.
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#3
I don't usually go for it but this time I did. I might change it up if it makes a difference.