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Here is a incomplete song that I wrote with the intention of testing different rhythms and what not. The whole verse / chorus doesn't flow well, but that is sortof the point of the song. It is meant to be a bit jarring.

Note:
- Drums are pretty bad! I'm no drummer people!
- Bass is pretty root notey, except during the verse; I think it has a cool riff happenin' there.
- I have no idea whats happening with the keys, best to ignore them.

Anyhoo any suggestions or tips would be great. Particular on what to do with the keys - I really want to involve them more - I was thinking a stattaco off time palm muted riff with a dark jazzy piano solo of chromatically moving strings...

Thanks.