#1
This is my first so don't be too harsh on me, crits are very welcome thought. I'll give you a crit in return.


My Star

I need you
I need you
Although you're never near
Your voice is all I can hear
I long to hold you close

Before I met you my heart was black as night
In that black sky now shines a star so bright
So bright that it's all I can see
So bright that without it I can no longer be me
Please let me be the same as you are to me

Baby I need you
Oooh, how I need you
Baby I need you
Oooh, how I love you

Not because of the way you look
Or because of that beautiful voice
Not because of the things you say
But because of who you are

Baby I need you
Oooh, how I need you
Baby I need you
Oooh, how I love you

Baby, I need you
Ooh, how I long for Friday
Baby it you that I need
Ooh, how I love you
Cause that's when we'll meet
#2
Its pretty good for your first song, you ryhme words with each other

So bright that without it I can no longer be me
Please let me be the same as you are to me

some people dont like that, but the way you used them, it sounds okay dont make it a habit though but its pretty good