#1
Just in case you did'nt know every song I've ever wrote is rather connected with the stroys i write or is about someone... I base alot of my lyric writing style off of Maynerd and Claudio sanchez


" Bishop"

" Do you?
See me?
For what I turned into
A demon a monster!
But you go ahead and evolve with me now
Can I hold you?
As I held on to all my friends
Will I see you?
Alive in the end...
Alive in the end


You saw this coming from a mile away
That I would betray her.. I could'nt stay.
But she'll get me in the end
What can I say to the Demons that haunt Trarii?
AFter this there will be hell...... to pay

(Chorus thingie)
Come along with me my dear old friend
Were gonna end it all tonight.. You and I
In this i will say that ttis is a bad idea
But this fighting must be done.

(Verse thingie)
Catch 22
Yes I was a fool
But so are you
So lets give this I try
I dont need this life to be fair to me
When it will be given in the end
Do such words freighten her?
My words shock me as well
Now off to hell we go
What awaits we dont know
But as long I have you
erything will work out just fine
I'm gonna leave this place behind

(Chorus)




Thats all i got so far
"No knows how the story goes, the end speaks to me
It says "Go Find another book " Or beter yet write the story yourself cause look, when She goes you wont be following" -"The eyes of worship"
#2
I like some of it. U kept the meter during most of it.
Sounds like something all American rejects would write. Though
#3
Quote by blackmonday23
I like some of it. U kept the meter during most of it.


What does taht mean?
"No knows how the story goes, the end speaks to me
It says "Go Find another book " Or beter yet write the story yourself cause look, when She goes you wont be following" -"The eyes of worship"
#4
Meter is like the rythm of the words. Like..the timing and stressed unstressd sylabus and how it flows together. or something like that xD i hope that answers your question.

Great lyrics by the way. Some parts need a bit of work. But overall, Good work =]
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#5
Quote by Blooddawning
Meter is like the rythm of the words. Like..the timing and stressed unstressd sylabus and how it flows together. or something like that xD i hope that answers your question.

Great lyrics by the way. Some parts need a bit of work. But overall, Good work =]


What parts need work?
"No knows how the story goes, the end speaks to me
It says "Go Find another book " Or beter yet write the story yourself cause look, when She goes you wont be following" -"The eyes of worship"