#1
I tried to call you on the phone today
But to you, I’m nothing more than stand-by
So relax, have a day off
But I won’t be back for years to come

I’m swelling up inside to push you away
In meanings you could never understand
In a way to surpass conclusive intuitions
So die your death as I want you to

Can I call you my own, or is there another?
I will give you strength when you’re not strong
I will be the one you call when trouble rises
So be so kind to grant me my wish goodbye

I will sleep on a tear-stricken bed tonight
In angel’s attempts to lust
I bear candles to whistle in the wind
So destroy what was never mine to begin with

Who will pick you up when I am gone?
I’ve never been one to forgive
Clash upon titan’s breaths once more
And I’ll give you the mention of being noticed

Can I call you my own, or is there another?
I will give you strength when you’re not strong
I will be the one you call when trouble rises
So be so kind to grant me my wish goodbye

I wish we could be as one, I really do
But you never seem to care enough
So I’ll shed a tear in your name
But never again will I be tamed
#2
I like that, really good work. You could try and write a chorus part, but other than that, no bad news to come from me.

two nuggets of info:
1) There's no such thing as bad lyrics, just lyrics that could be improved on
2) Don't judge a person by what they write, but by what they don't write

It is therefore now impossible for people to say you never write this type of song.... =D
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yeah fire him secretly... thats what im doing except im firing myself and secretly joining someone elses band

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thanks for the compliment man!