#1
Never Again

Standing around,
Waiting for the tanoy to call your name out loud,
A lost voice,
A lost child,
An unhappy phone call to the parents tonight

Stand still,
Let yourself be counted,
Stand your ground,
Stop and try to help those on the ground,
While the police watch without a sound.

96 unforgotten lives,
They had it in front of them,
The writings not present,
But the pages are never torn,
Still quiet and start to mourn,
They'll never be ingnored,
Again

The mothers who cried,
The day their boy died,
The authorities sat still,
And watch the surge take their kill,

96 unforgotten lives,
They had it in front of them,
The writings not present,
But the pages are never torn,
Still quiet and start to mourn,
They'll never be ingnored,

96 unforgotten lives,
They had it in front of them,
The writings not present,
But the pages are never torn,
Still quiet and start to mourn,
They'll never be ingnored,

Again.



not sure if it is finished or not, C4C.

Some of you may understand...

Cheers!
#3
I liked the first and third stanzas. A lot of the rhymes seemed done.....'cried-died' 'mourn-torn' 'ground-sound'. The third stanza is repeated way to many times, takes away from the piece as a whole. Take a look at mine maybe? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=844751
Quote by ottoavist

i suppose there's a chance
i'm just a litte too shallow to consider
that maybe i've been a little more eager
each day to wake up and take a shower
brush my teeth and smile for the mirror