#1
As I see the points of my life
They all make me sad
I’ve found a lot to live for
In such a simple thing
And as I walk out all alone
There’s not a place in site I’d call home
But I keep walking away even though
I know I’m heading the wrong way
I know I should turn around and find some life left in me

God take me away
I wasn’t meant to be here
Let the earth go round with out me
Take me out and leave me alone
The bridge won’t let me drown
The soap only washes my soul
You don’t want me here
No, you don’t want me here
Oh, dear I’ve tried so hard to leave
And here I ask myself
What reason do I have to find what’s left of me?

The pain won’t go away
I’ve been told it’s all my fault all my life
Even though it never was
Some one always told me I’m doing everything wrong
Back then and even know
And as I keep walking by
I watched my life slip on by
The cold is eating me away
I’m so awful
I shouldn’t have deserved to go on this long

God take me away
I wasn’t meant to be here
Let the earth go round with out me
Take me out and leave me alone
The bridge won’t let me drown
The soap only washes my soul
You don’t want me here
No, you don’t want me here
Oh, dear I’ve tried so hard to leave
And here I ask myself
What reason do I have to find what’s left of me?

(bridge)
The love there was for me
Has been reduced to ashes in the blink of an eye
And now I ask you bridge please let me drown
Make the pain go away
Cleanse my soul make me whole
There’s nothing left to prove
I don’t have you
Just before I reach the water
I feel the thud
I hear the water
I touch the dark
And here I find myself
Freezing cold on a road
The people pass me by
They don’t see me
Oh, they don’t see me
I’m obviously alive
But it would make sense if I was not

God take me away
I wasn’t meant to be here
Let the earth go round with out me
Take me out and leave me alone
The bridge won’t let me drown
The soap only washes my soul
You don’t want me here
No, you don’t want me here
Oh, dear I’ve tried so hard to leave
And here I ask myself
What reason do I have to find what’s left of me?

I put "take me away" but I'm not sure if that’s what I want the title to be. Any suggestions? and yeah I know its a bit long.
#2
I dunno about this one. It seems like it's all just one big complaint, and I didn't really enjoy reading it. It was sort of... meh. Just bland. You know? No rhyming (not that you need it) but most of all, no flow. I just didn't see how it flowed. Maybe it's just me. I dunno, like I said.

EDIT: Sorry if that came off as mean or something, but I just wrote what I felt...
ok, yeah. my name is silly because I signed up when I was 13.

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#3
Quote by ratmblink123
I dunno about this one. It seems like it's all just one big complaint, and I didn't really enjoy reading it. It was sort of... meh. Just bland. You know? No rhyming (not that you need it) but most of all, no flow. I just didn't see how it flowed. Maybe it's just me. I dunno, like I said.

EDIT: Sorry if that came off as mean or something, but I just wrote what I felt...

No I appreciate your honesty. I wrote this one a long time ago. I think I need to cut a lot out of it.
#5
thanks I think this is a little better. still needs work.

I see the memories of my life
They all make me sad
I’ve found a lot to live for
In such a simple thing
As I walk out all alone
There’s not a place I’d call home

God take me away
I wasn’t meant to be here
Let the earth go round with out me
You don’t want me here
No, you don’t want me here
Oh, dear I’ve tried so hard to leave

As I keep on walking by
I watched my life slip on by
The pain won’t go away
And it’s been there along time
Back then and even know
The cold is eating me away
I shouldn’t have deserved to go on this long

God take me away
I wasn’t meant to be here
Let the earth go round with out me
You don’t want me here
No, you don’t want me here
Oh, dear I’ve tried so hard to leave

The bridge won’t let me drown
The soap only washes my soul
And here I ask myself
What reason do I have to find what’s left of me?
The love there was for me
Has been reduced to ashes in the blink of an eye

God take me away
I wasn’t meant to be here
Let the earth go round with out me
You don’t want me here
No, you don’t want me here
Oh, dear I’ve tried so hard to leave


Cleanse my soul make me whole
There’s nothing left to prove
I don’t have you
I feel the thud
I hear the water
I touch the dark
And here I find myself
Freezing cold on a road
The people pass me by
Oh, they don’t see me
I’m obviously alive
Yet I feel so dead

God take me away
I wasn’t meant to be here
Let the earth go round with out me
You don’t want me here
No, you don’t want me here
Oh, dear I’ve tried so hard to leave