#1
In and out in an instance
Can't forget about your existence
I finally realized what I'm missing
I'm missing you
And all of the things that I never needed
I finally realized how conceited
I was for not realizing how much I needed you too

Why did you have to go?
Why couldn't you stay?
I think they took the wrong man
I think god made his biggest mistake
2nd to leaving here in this world without you
No matter what, I'll never forget about you
How am I ever gonna survive down here without you?
Just know that I'll never be without you
I'll never be without you

You inspired me
And my desire lit the fire
That was hidden deep inside your soul
Now you'll never know
The secrets I never told
I should've came clean long ago

Why did you have to go?
Why couldn't you stay?
I think they took the wrong man
I think god made his biggest mistake
2nd to leaving here in this world without you
No matter what, I'll never forget about you
How am I ever gonna survive down here without you?
Just know that I'll never be without you
I'll never be without you

I know that you know
That I knew that you knew
I saw this coming all along
I just didn't think that it would come so soon

Why did you have to go?
Why couldn't you stay?
I think they took the wrong man
I think god made his biggest mistake
2nd to leaving here in this world without you
No matter what, I'll never forget about you
How am I ever gonna survive down here without you?
Just know that I'll never be without you
I'll never be without you
#3
it was very good, to me anyway. i write death metal but i actually liked this. reminded me of my past, and i like songs that remind me of where i used to be and where i am today. but maybee you should have consentrated on another verse or 2 instead of writing your chorus 3 times. unless this is a punk song then it would be alright. you definatly have something going here, you should work on it becasue i believe you could make it way better with a little work.

8/10
#4
It's petty deep and the song has soul, but it only goes around the same theme just expressing the same emotion in diffrent phrases. I think it's very good lyrics the way that it is, if you could add a diffrent plot that has to do with the theme of lyrics, it would be much mroe intresting.

8/10
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#5
I reallly love it.
It reminds me of the relationshjip between me and my uncle. we were really close and he inspired me too write.
The only bad thing i could say is try to keep the verses down to like either 5 line or whatever u choose.

i wrote something very similar
crit it when you have time maybe?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=827411
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Dream like you will live forever.
Live like you're going to die tomorrow,
and love like it is never gonna hurt."
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