#2
good melody and instrumental parts, but the lyrics just don't fit it. You're trying to fit too many words in there.
But the rest was very good
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#3
That's a pretty sweet melody. Cerveza is right, you did try to fit to many words in there. Try to keep the vocal melody simple when using such soothing guitar melodys. I wouldn't have put that effect on the vocals either, it makes it seam like your not a confident singer. The song was pretty good though, keep it up.
#4
Good song the melody sounds really good. i agree with the lyrics and also i think you should turn down the bass a little it's drowning out the lryics( its that or the bass on my speakers is to high) the solo is sounds good.

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#5
hmmm well first thing i noticed is the bass is way to high in the mix...it sounds good just too much bass ha.......like the little melody after the chorus.....same as above with the cramming of words...overall wasn't bad i liked it......c4c eh? my thread
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#6
Thanks for the crit; the vocals haven't got any effects on by the way. It’s might be because my voice is just a bit weird.I've been listening to a bit of Dylan lately so the lyrics are more rapped than sung lol.
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