#1
Alright, this is my firs attempt at writing lyrics. Its a long way from being finished, i have just put up the general idea for the song. Its actualy about a train loaded with dynamite, speeding out of control into a sleepy village. Its suposed to something of a hard rock song. And yes, the last line is really bad. I know.
Also, any helpfull tips would be apreciated.

Going fast Running free
Down the hill away form me
A train speeds down the slope
Out of control!

The deadly cargo within its holds
wanting to get out, wanting to explode
Going down the hill
With a big-ass ****ing speed


A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~
A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~
A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~
A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~

The little vilage ath the end of the slope
Sleeping soudly, don`t wanna let go
A crazy train running down the hill
It`s gonna crash
It`s gonna bleeeeeeeeeed!

~solo~

A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~
A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~
A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~
A locomotive full of dynamite! ~riff~

It hits the town late at night
People screaming, don`t wanna die
The locomotive makes a giant bang
Hiroshima looks like a farty man.
Joža je kul. On ma sirove z dodatki pa hambije.
#2
"It`s gonna bleeeeeeeeeed!"

Change that to "It's gonna blow." rhymes with go. =P
Feed your mind.
#3
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