#1
Verse 1:
I am innate hopeless, helpless and incapable
of having a damoiselle, not even forensics
will solve my situation, my stupid childhood
is full of embarrassment, humiliation, ugliness
and insult. The bullets are those buried in my
heart and veins are irremovable, I will bring
this miserable life until the day I die

Refrain:
I know that noone really cares about me, noone
listens to me and noone comprehends the way I
think and feel, My instincts said" This is my fate"

Chorus:
Dispatch me and kill me, It will never ever change
Despite the fact that I wish for it, I am always
a pathetic loser for sure, you just can't deny it

Verse 2:
Everyone else but me are winners, They instantly get
what they want, I wish to be like them but my destiny
forbids me, I am in the same level of an idiot person
who is hopeless for the rest of his life, The piece
of trash is more valuable than me, my hopes and dreams
are gone away

Bridge:
I need some medication for this but
sad to say I can't find any
This life that I'm living is a burning hell, You can't
escape so sorry you're done.
(Repeat)

So sorry you're done
#2
Quote by paramore_fans
Verse 1:
I am innate hopeless, helpless and incapable
of having a damoiselle, not even forensics
will solve my situation, my stupid childhood
is full of embarrassment, humiliation, ugliness
and insult. The bullets are those buried in my
heart and veins are irremovable, I will bring
this miserable life until the day I die

i like it, its goes through a complete thought process in one verse, i like the idea of childhood full of embarrassment, because everyone knows that, and the bullet are a good metaphor. really pessimsitic though.

Refrain:
I know that noone really cares about me, noone
listens to me and noone comprehends the way I
think and feel, My instincts said" This is my fate"

no one is two words, just so you know, good again, kinda rambling, you dont need to have a refrain, aslong as you have a strong chorus, the fate thing is alittle played, but im one to talk, i used one in my song icarus,ha. typical teenage depression, maybe you could do without this part.

Chorus:
Dispatch me and kill me, It will never ever change
Despite the fact that I wish for it, I am always
a pathetic loser for sure, you just can't deny it

the chorus is definately strong enough to do without the refrain, its great i like the dispatch me and kill me part, its a good thought, and the loser thing is reminds me alot of that one beck song i forget the name of. good though

Verse 2:
Everyone else but me are winners, They instantly get
what they want, I wish to be like them but my destiny
forbids me, I am in the same level of an idiot person
who is hopeless for the rest of his life, The piece
of trash is more valuable than me, my hopes and dreams
are gone away

you sould say idiotic person, good again, but it seems like your only making lateral moves from your theme, its not going anywhere, maybe you should rethink the idea of the second verse. the hopeless part is good though.

Bridge:
I need some medication for this but
sad to say I can't find any
This life that I'm living is a burning hell, You can't
escape so sorry you're done.
(Repeat)

good bridge, maybe repeat iwth a different ending line, just to mix it up, i like the "this life that im living is burning hell" its a good line

So sorry you're done

so in short rework some of the lines, the rhyme pattern isnt too appearnt, you might want to watch for that, you have some good ideas in it, the chorus is great, but the song is dragging alittle, it has potencial though. keep at it

would you care to take a look at mine? c4c?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=848174