#1
Okay, so this is a song that I've been working on for a few days now off and on. The reason for the cheesy name is that it's a school project (for a silly advertisement... for a tapeworm). I was just wondering what you guys could point out, help me to change.

Also if anyone wants to edit and play around with it, I'd much appreciate it, as of right now I don't like it that much. I think it needs a solo (that's not terribly hard as I'm not very good) and drums.

Please give me a hand and I'll C4C your songs if you'd like me to.
Attachments:
Tapeworm.zip
I've decided that my signature is terrible. I'm open to suggestions.


Click me, or I'll die.


# Un-nominated in UG Top 100,
#2
I dunno. better then I could do, but I personally think it was emotionless and boring. Sorry.
#3
Quote by ISuckAtBass92
I dunno. better then I could do, but I personally think it was emotionless and boring. Sorry.


Yeah, actually I kind of agree with you... I don't like it very much. I was hoping someone would help me out a little though. I come on here and I see some amazing writers and yeah, I don't know.
I've decided that my signature is terrible. I'm open to suggestions.


Click me, or I'll die.


# Un-nominated in UG Top 100,