Hi, well let me tell you what I think.

Firstly, and this is just my opinion, but I can't stand that riff you've got for the majority of the song...maybe its just not my thing. Also, personally I would change how you are going about recording your bass...it sounds too clean, without reverb, and sort of like you've recorded it via direct line-in as opposed to micing an amp.

All of that being said, I thought the chorus-y part was great and was really the redeeming aspect of the song and I wouldn't change anything about it. with a different verse I could really get into this song.
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the composition is pretty good but the bass seems to be too solid and dry, you should give it some space and depth. it just needs a wicked solo and you could pass as a buckethead protege with the whole drug and goat porn vibe going (in a good way) c4c, it's on my profile, thanks

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Ambient noise and a bassline to kick it off. nice. has a really eerie feel to it, right now it sounds like it can go anywhere while youre developing it... i read "folk rock" and uh i dont think im in for that (i could be wrong)...

guitar came in, playing the riff out. i think the bass sounds a tad too muddy, consider using Low pass filters on everything that doesnt have bass, to tighten things up a bit in the mix. This sounds like something for a movie.

Kicks into the cymbal crash with the progression. I like the sounds in the back happening the keyboard textures. Sounds really tight... rather "coldplayish" but theres no need to compare things here as this is orignal music.

Obviously theres no vox, which could really put this song up since its really got a catchy accessible sound to it. Consider doing that, or collabing with someone.

Overall good stuff, the mix could use some work, but for what it is, its well played/written. Nice work.
Regarding the bass issues....

I don't have a bass amp, it's just all my Vox AD30VT that is lined out to my computer. I'm recording with audacity and i don't really know if i'm capable of making the bass sound much better. From anyone experienced here with good knowledge of sound and all that jazz.. what could i do to that bass line to make it sound better? (with the gear i currently have).

Thanks for the crits.
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