#1
Crit for crit

Just an acoustic piece I wrote today, could maybe you use one more verse to end properly.

Footsteps

When the sun disappears and rain clouds appear
When you follow the footsteps into the woods
And the babies calling you to come back home
But you must now follow, follow the sound
Because there is a house deep in the forest
Where the trees whisper and the wind howls
Faces in the shadows from a silent dream
They've come calling once again

Those who've heard the footsteps, must now follow the sound
They now the will be lead, far from their homes
When you hear the voices calling, don't be alarmed
They know where you're heading, they just envy the sound

You may have found your steppingstones
Across the ever changing river
But there are memories reflected in the water
Voices upon the breeze tingling inside your bones
You know what sleeps beneath still waters
You know what was created amongst dead flowers
The naked man crying upon the hill
Makes you realize who comes calling again

Those who've heard the footsteps, must now follow the sound
They now the will be lead, far from their homes
When you hear the voices calling, don't be alarmed
They know where you're heading, they just envy the sound

Sleeping on the shore by the street filled with wanderers
Just a reflection of your former self
The crowd rejoices they have become fishermen
You see your old nets lie torn and broken
It's been so long since you embraced the ocean
You cried out you were just one of the dreamers
That dreamed died a long time ago
But you know he has come calling again
#3
Quote by szekelymihai
Its so difficult to crit lyrics without a melody/viceversa. Gimme some chords and a time signature(maybe a tempo) and then ill know better hehe


Capo second fret, so you play the B as and Amajor the rest of the chords are still the same barre chords.

4/4
verse just repeat every two sentences: B Dbm, B Abm

Chorus every two sentences: Abm - Ebm - Dbm - B


But maybe you could just criticizes the lyrics on content, flow, rhyme, imagery ect......
#4
The only thing I didn't like was the repeating of the word "follow" in the first stanza. Other than that I liked it. Thanks for the crit.