#1
Hey this is a song/poem that I just started writng for my Girlfriend. I'm not that great at writing so any help would be greatly apprichated

verse:
Your grey misty mountain eyes
you know they just shimmer in the light
Girl when I'm holding you at night
It just feels so right

Chorus:
Girl your so beautiful
I just love being here with you
Girl your so beautiful
I just hope you know it's true

Verse:
I love the way you laugh at all the stupid things I say
You know it just completes my day
I love the way you smile at me
It just lets me know that everything is ok

Verse
The way you bite your lip
You know it drives me crazy
The way you tease me with a kiss
Girl you know it drives me wild
Guitars:
PRS Custom 24
Gibson Les Paul 60's Tribute
85' MIJ Strat
97' Snakepit Les Paul
LP Traditional 1960 Zebra
MIJ Tele
MIA Strat

Amps:
Silver Jubilee 2525
Peavey Ultra 112
Jet City JCA50H
66' Bassman
Pink Paisley Princeton RV
74' Vibro Champ
Last edited by sheldonpardy at May 27, 2008,
#2
thats good made me think of my girlfriend,i liked it really simpel and it has a good emotinal feel to it.
Ibanez sz720fm,Ibbly RG350DX, Custom Tele-> Dunlop 535Q->RAT Pro co II-> Ibanez Fuzz->Marshall Haze 40.
Tascam US-800 and a hand full of Mics into Nedundo 4

my music, new recording on the way in 2014

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#3
Thanks a lot man
Guitars:
PRS Custom 24
Gibson Les Paul 60's Tribute
85' MIJ Strat
97' Snakepit Les Paul
LP Traditional 1960 Zebra
MIJ Tele
MIA Strat

Amps:
Silver Jubilee 2525
Peavey Ultra 112
Jet City JCA50H
66' Bassman
Pink Paisley Princeton RV
74' Vibro Champ
#4
this inspired me to write my girl a poem/song now take a look ill probly have it up in a hour or so peace man.
Ibanez sz720fm,Ibbly RG350DX, Custom Tele-> Dunlop 535Q->RAT Pro co II-> Ibanez Fuzz->Marshall Haze 40.
Tascam US-800 and a hand full of Mics into Nedundo 4

my music, new recording on the way in 2014

[B]insert witty italicized quote here
#6
I'm going to give it to her tonight.
I hope she likes it
Guitars:
PRS Custom 24
Gibson Les Paul 60's Tribute
85' MIJ Strat
97' Snakepit Les Paul
LP Traditional 1960 Zebra
MIJ Tele
MIA Strat

Amps:
Silver Jubilee 2525
Peavey Ultra 112
Jet City JCA50H
66' Bassman
Pink Paisley Princeton RV
74' Vibro Champ