#1
At the tender age of three I did my best to climb a tree
But as I fell right to the ground I shortly after found
That you must crawl before you walk, yeah you must sink before you swim
Maybe I shouldn’t reach for the sky
Maybe it’s just a bit too high

And at the height of my maturity, I can still only depend on me
These people I’m surrounded with will do nothing but push and kick
At my body as I fall
So just call me Berlin because I’m building up my walls

While crucified on my cross of deceit with blood in my hair and nails in my feet
I curse to nothing, in hopes that somebody
Will save me from myself and put me back up on the shelf
But until then all I can do is wait
For that cross to seal my fate

Now we’re all falling over backwards and hoping to be caught
Yeah we’re praying for a miracle and giving no more than a passing thought
To that chance that we’ll be forgotten and dropped upon the floor
But we don’t care about that anymore.
Yeah we know that feeling for sure

Judging by the life that I’ve been living, well The Beatles must have lied
Because I’m needing more than love right now in my attempts to get by
But the arms of a caring woman would do more good than bad
And with the luck that I’ve been having it can’t be worse than what I’ve had
So I’ll just toss my name in the hat.

And now I’ve been strumming on this guitar writing all these songs for you
But not it seems to be my turn, yeah I’m long overdue
We need a song of hope and longing, but we’ll get that no time soon
So I’ll continue with this symphony of forgotten, lonesome tunes
As I sing out to the sky about these familiar blues
#2
Quote by lespaulsg09
At the tender age of three I did my best to climb a tree
But as I fell right to the ground I shortly after found
That you must crawl before you walk, yeah you must sink before you swim
Maybe I shouldn’t reach for the sky
Maybe it’s just a bit too high
I like the "sink before you swim" bit. It's sort of sad, but in a good way. It made me think.

And at the height of my maturity, I can still only depend on me
These people I’m surrounded with will do nothing but push and kick
At my body as I fall
So just call me Berlin because I’m building up my walls
"call me Berlin" is GREAT. I can't really say much more about this stanza.

While crucified on my cross of deceit with blood in my hair and nails in my feet
I curse to nothing, in hopes that somebody
Will save me from myself and put me back up on the shelf
But until then all I can do is wait
For that cross to seal my fate
I dunno about this. You changed the direction of the song way too fast, and I don't like how you rhymed "myself" and "shelf".

Now we’re all falling over backwards and hoping to be caught
Yeah we’re praying for a miracle and giving no more than a passing thought
To that chance that we’ll be forgotten and dropped upon the floor
But we don’t care about that anymore.
Yeah we know that feeling for sure
This is more like the beginning, it fits better. I like the word choice so far in this song though. Not your everyday stuff...

Judging by the life that I’ve been living, well The Beatles must have lied
Because I’m needing more than love right now in my attempts to get by
But the arms of a caring woman would do more good than bad
And with the luck that I’ve been having it can’t be worse than what I’ve had
So I’ll just toss my name in the hat.
The Beatles reference is superb, along with the "toss my name in the hat" line. Great words.

And now I’ve been strumming on this guitar writing all these songs for you
But not it seems to be my turn, yeah I’m long overdue
We need a song of hope and longing, but we’ll get that no time soon
So I’ll continue with this symphony of forgotten, lonesome tunes
As I sing out to the sky about these familiar blues


I like how you mention you're strumming your guitar, and I like how you titled this based on the last line. These were great lyrics, I'd say a 7/10 just because of that one stanza I didn't like. I hope to see more from you.

-Alex
ok, yeah. my name is silly because I signed up when I was 13.

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#3
When you say "changed the direction of the song" do you mean physically, or with the message its putting across?

And thanks for the feedback