#1
More of my song lyric oriented stuff.
"Out The Gates"

I can’t tell what I was looking for
When I sprinted out your door
I was looking for something new
Somewhere that life could be true

I reached out to the clouds and sang,
“I am free!” as your alarm rang.
You ran out the gates, and who’d you see?
I can’t tell you, but it wasn’t me!

I,
Walk this path of utmost freedom
And I,
Don’t mind your problems, I can’t see them.
Why,
Do you search, and search, all just for
Me
I don’t plan on letting you see.
At all...

I run from all the men you send
When is this search gonna end?
You won’t find me, but you say
You will find me by today.

I reached out to the clouds and sang,
“I am free!” as your alarm rang.
You ran out the gates, and who did you see?
I can’t tell you, but it wasn’t me!

I,
Walk this path of utmost freedom
And I,
Don’t mind your problems, I can’t see them.
Why,
Do you search, and search, all just for
Me
I don’t plan on letting you see.
At all...
ok, yeah. my name is silly because I signed up when I was 13.

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#3
Quote by mdlarry7
do you have music for that?

Yeah, actually I do. It's just an acoustic bit that I wrote. Why do you ask?
ok, yeah. my name is silly because I signed up when I was 13.

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#4
If you keep writing for at least another two years, you will look back on this and laugh.

Your flows is solid and consistent, which is why I expect you to continue writing because they are the main parts of song writing. The actual content was rather wishy-washy, everyday forum songwriting. No offence.

Like I said, there's a foundation to be built on and if you keep on writing you will see what I mean when I say you'll laugh at this.

Thankyou for your kind words, I appreciate them.