#1
well im bored so i decided to write a new song or poem, if its good ill put it to music
(angels demons voices and cards part 3) click on the link in my sig to see the first 2 parts.
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angels and demons,
no ghosts

telling me what to do,
the weirdest lies becoming true.
it's pointless to supress
the consequences of this stress.

war within my mind,to be torn in two,
the past has passed.

rid of my ghosts to embrace my good and bad
others call me mad.
my angels and my demons taking control
the shredding of my soul.


angels and demons,
no ghosts

telling me what to do,
the weirdest lies becoming true.
it's pointless to digress
the consequences of this stress.

letting go of my past
healing the scars at last
the sanity is gone,
but the man's still hanging on.

angels and demons no ghosts.
angels and demons, ghosts don't exist

trying to move on
moving on through the fight
past what's now gone for so long.

moving forwards,
past my padded walls.
my angels and my demons.
my sanity's fall.
No more ghosts.
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c4c, thanks for reading.
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Last edited by Mr.Cuddles at May 11, 2008,
#2
change it to just angels and demons for one thing. otherwise it aint to bad.
#3
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change it to just angels and demons for one thing. otherwise it aint to bad.

the reason it says no gosts is to refrence the past being left behind...
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#4
It is a good piece.. only it is a bit repeatitive... i like how you use the word ghosts...
#5
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It is a good piece.. only it is a bit repeatitive... i like how you use the word ghosts...

awsome, im glad you liked it and thanks for telling me it was repetitive, i might fix that when i put it in my collection.
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#6
I thought it was amazing. What's this song about?
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#7
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I thought it was amazing. What's this song about?

a few things, its about us leaving behind our pasts and living, soiceties forgetting it's mistakes and it's just fighting back and forward.
and my internal fight between being a good or bad person.
it's also about no matter what how our old selves will alweays be there even if you leave behind your "ghosts"

it's part of a series m writing, this is #3 the first 2 are in my profile blog.
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Mr Cuddles pretty much nailed it...

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#9
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a few things, its about us leaving behind our pasts and living, soiceties forgetting it's mistakes and it's just fighting back and forward.
and my internal fight between being a good or bad person.
it's also about no matter what how our old selves will alweays be there even if you leave behind your "ghosts"

it's part of a series m writing, this is #3 the first 2 are in my profile blog.


I love meangingfull songs. I could just tell your song had a lot of meaning and history to it. I hate the songs now a days written about stupid things with no meaning behind them. I'll be sure to check out your others.
Party
Pants
In
My
Come
Wanna
You?


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#10
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I love meangingfull songs. I could just tell your song had a lot of meaning and history to it. I hate the songs now a days written about stupid things with no meaning behind them. I'll be sure to check out your others.

thanks, i appreciate it
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#11
Highly enjoyed that song.

angels and demons,
no ghosts

telling me what to do,
the weirdest lies becoming true.
it's pointless to supress
the consequences of this stress.
That's probably the best part of song, the only negative points I could raise is perhaps the repetition. Perhaps you could change Supress into Digress for the second repetition?
Or something along those lines.

Overall. Brilliant =]
#12
thanks, thats part 3 im about to post part 4
then next week i'll do 2 more(that rhymed )

Edit: ill do what you said BTW
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