#1
This is my revised edition of my first song "Wasting the Day Away." I'm only thirteen and i want some replies to this please!

I Don't know where I'm going,
or what i'm trying to find.
But I'll just keep on walking on,
I'm trying to unwind...

Chorus:
I JUST NEED TO GET AWAY!
DROP WHAT I'M DOING AND TAKE THE DAY !!
I DON'T HAVE MUCH ELSE LEFT TO SAY!!
I'M TIRED OF WASTING THE DAY AWAY!!!

Just keep on walking for a while,
there's nothing left for you to say.
Wasting the day in single file,
I can't do it another way!!!

All this ringing in my ear,
I just want to disappear.
Things aren't the way they used to be,
there's not enough time for plain ol' me!


I need something else to do,
this has nothing to do with you.
I just need to find my way,
all i want to do is fade away!

Chorus Repeat

I'm letting this go,
It's all in my past!
I can't go on,
This can't last!
I'm letting this go,
It's all in my PAST!!!

Now I take my final bow,
all this pain, it ends right now.
I'm letting this out,
It's not coming back,
Setting me free,
Where i need to be!
Last edited by WestNile6 at May 11, 2008,
#2
Ah, again it shows your age's anger and linkin park listening...
On the other hand, if you're not angry at the age of 13 then there;s something wrong...
It is a bit better now
have you checked on my new one, "noone can tell you"? front page
#3
I didn't base this off of Linkin Park so much as i did Puddle of Mud. I wanted to have a different vibe altogether, but did you think it came of as like, emo or goth or anything???
#6
Well first off... "METAL WILL NEVER DIE!!" maybe. But it might get rusty. Write a song about metal representing the younger generation and rust representing the older generation. As time goes on the rust corrodes the metal and it gets rusty. and gradually the younger generation becomes the older generation. But there’s always more metal in the earth and one way or another it never goes away.

As for your song. Well it says your angry at you boredom. Not very deep. Kind of flat. Not bad for a song writer at your age. It’s about what I'd expect.