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Quote by Neon Days

In these days,
The future is already past,
Caught up in the rat race,
You’d be lucky to last,
For five seconds of fame,
We put our soul on the line,
The audience isn’t captive,
They are lions to tame,

Pre -chorus
Are you quick to judge?
Does nobody care?
Are you same as them?
Is there nobody there?

Chorus
If somebody listens if somebody cares,
If somebody holds you when nobodies there,
If something special comes your way,
Then take my hand and seize the day,

We look at our past,
To make sense of the future,
Is it something you believe?
That I wear my heart on my sleeve,
Even when the devil dogs,
Are raging at my door,
When the audience asks for more,
Than I can give,

Pre -chorus
Are you quick to judge?
Does nobody care?
Are you without love?
Is there nobody there?

Chorus
If somebody listens if somebody cares,
If somebody holds you when nobodies there,
If something special comes your way,
Then take my hand and seize the day,

Outro
I’ve given more than I can give,
I’ve given more blood than I need to live,
Don’t let life pass you by,
Don’t let life pass you by,

Very very pleased with this one.
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#2
you should be pleased, it was very good, i found the pre-chorus fairly weak but the whole song was pretty good overall the first line of the outro was fairly cliche, but te second made up for it.
i liked it!

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