#1
Angels, Demons, Voices and Cards( Oh My)

Were

Angels are flying,
Sky is falling,
Memories dancing,
The demons calling.
Total confusion,
So alive,
Decisions on hold,
On chaos they thrive.
I’m one card short,
missing a piece,
From the whole deck,
Sanity’s cease.


Grey sky beckons
Must stay on path
Padded walls to hold me back.
Time to face confusion’s wrath

Is
Skies aren't flying
Angels are falling
Memories dancing
Accepted demons calling.
Total confusion-
-Never this numb,
Decisions useless
Why were we so dumb?

The grass is wrong,
But that’s alright
I’m not dead,
yet not quite right.


parts 1-3 are in my profile(blog) click on my sig if you want to read.
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Last edited by Mr.Cuddles at May 12, 2008,
#2
That's really, really good. How long did that take you?
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#3
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That's really, really good. How long did that take you?

thanks.
12 minuits max if u dont count the break i took for lunch
EDIT: im jst guessing becaus i turn my clock over wen i write but im just geussing because it looked like the numbers went up that much when i fixed them
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Mr.Cuddles killed The Metal!!!! FUCK YES!

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Mr Cuddles pretty much nailed it...

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Last edited by Mr.Cuddles at May 11, 2008,
#4
i dont know what it was about his one, it just didnt seem to go right...some parts were amazingly good some parts brought the whole song down...
#5
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i dont know what it was about his one, it just didnt seem to go right...some parts were amazingly good some parts brought the whole song down...

thanks, can u tell me which parts were the awkward ones?
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Mr.Cuddles killed The Metal!!!! FUCK YES!

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Mr Cuddles pretty much nailed it...

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"Oh Mr.Cuddles, you make my pants go boom boom. I are horny. Do not disappoint I"


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#6
i would change a little bit, personally...

Sky aren't flying
Angels are falling
Memories are dancing
Accepted demons calling.

i liked this piece though
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#7
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i would change a little bit, personally...

Sky aren't flying
Angels are falling
Memories are dancing
Accepted demons calling.

i liked this piece though

wow, thanks, those 2 words made it so much better. I edited it in.
thanks for crit.
Quote by Eliyahu
Mr.Cuddles killed The Metal!!!! FUCK YES!

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Mr Cuddles pretty much nailed it...

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"Oh Mr.Cuddles, you make my pants go boom boom. I are horny. Do not disappoint I"


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