#1
A set of lyrics. Yeah, that's right - A fucking set of lyrics. For an acoustic song. I don' care. Written while drunk and mad at my ex. They're terrible, but so am I. Rip it to shreds.


I know where you will go,
When all your friends don't want to talk to you no more.
You'll go to Urban Outfitters and buy expensive clothes,
then catch a bus to Ole' Kentucky to catch a hipster show.
I worry about your college life and what you'll do,
A paint supply kit and Robert Crumb to hook a boy or two,
and they'll taste your sweet and wrap a bow on you,
Then get left behind in the mess and place the blame on you.
In Hell there's a cliff that beautifully looks over River Styx.
In Hell they play the same Tim Kasher mix.
In Hell the weather's always warm.
In Hell you can parade around in shorts.
I can't see why the codependency
that's backed up in my blood has spurred this constant fight with me.
I'd rather count on you then go home and get the sex for free.
Poor advice.
#2
*hands ripped shreds to stellar_legs*

nahh, wasn't that bad. the only thing that bothered me was the end of line two, should be "anymore" not "no more."
other than that, i thought it was pretty catchy. ironically, this is exactly the style of song i pictured you writing.

...because i sit at home and ponder what kind of songs you would write. if you wrote them.
#3
I think it goes downhill after you mention Tim Kasher.
which is fitting.
but yeah, I think your other stuff is definitely better than this.
Agghh skeet, skeet, crit me, skeet, skeet!
#5
the tim kasher line is truer than true
love dead like a crushed fly

for those of you who said you'd be interested in hearing my lyrics put to music- I started work on recording an album, if you get in touch with me pm or otherwise I'd be more than happy to fill you in
#8
Thank you.

I want to record soon, so I'm trying to bash out songs, because I write songs at a snail's pace.
Poor advice.
#9
i like this, it actully kind of reminds me of my ex
maybe we have simular taste in women
the tim kasher line seems strange but i love him so i like it
because it reminds me how awesome he is

in the line "In Hell you can parade around in shorts." i would say put a always between can and parade but that might mess up the flow of your song

the last line i like but it doesn't make sense for me
i don't know what you mean when you say" get the sex for free"

i think this work great has a poem but i know about has a song
so let me know when you do record it because id like to hear it

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=858361
if you have the time