#1
this is a song that i've been working on, I posted a version of it, and this is a second version of it. i hope that it's decent

You Wouldn't Stay (With Me)

I .. could take pictures of you
I .. could help ease your pain
I .. could sense your mischief
we’d drive and smoke down the country lanes

I’m a fashion emergency
sweet talk you into dressing me for free
but I don’t know if you’d like me
when I’m high on vitamin C

and you wouldn’t stay, with me
you wouldn’t stay
you wouldn’t stay, with me
you wouldn’t stay

you.. wanted a real man
you.. wanted the real Moroccan black
I .. couldn’t afford your company
you couldn’t afford to take me back

Were .. I the one
were .. the music not left behind
If I were Doherty's glass chicken pipe
you'd smoke me and blow out my mind

but you wouldn’t stay, with me
you wouldn’t stay
you wouldn’t stay, with me
you wouldn’t stay

sometimes.. I hear the radio
and the song reminds me again
you were spposed to be next to me here
driving down this country lane

you had the face of an angel
angel with a black eye
sometimes I saw you as better than me
and I don’t know why

but you wouldn’t stay, with me
you wouldn’t stay
you wouldn’t stay, with me
you wouldn’t stay
(and I’ll never forget your face)
Last edited by parkt921k at May 14, 2008,
#3
Quote by parkt921k
this is a song that i've been working on, I posted a version of it, and this is a second version of it. i hope that it's decent


Liked some parts better than others, overall quite nice - although feels pretty stereotypical and close to boring at places "Were I the one" and such feels... Quite dull, to be honest.

Quote by parkt921k

If I were Doherty's glass chicken pipe
you'd smoke me and blow out my mind


That part made me laugh