#1
Song for my band called Mmmyes...
I realize it is a stupid title haha...
I also realize how it is going to be tough to picture these lyrics without the music, but please give me your honest opinion.

I found a picture of us, the other day
And surely enough, it brought a smile to my face
But with these words that beckon love and loss
I hold fear of your smile, fear of your love
Or lack thereof

(Chorus)
And I can't hear a word you're saying
No I can't hear a ****ing word you're saying
I can't hear a word you're saying
(Woah, oh, woah ooh oh oh, woah, oh, woah ooh oh oh)
No, I can't hear a ****ing word you're saying
(Woah, oh, woah ooh oh oh, woah, oh, woah ooh oh oh)
(Chorus)

And all our paper memories, let 'em burn

(Short, rockish breakdown)

To the fire with this love, it's killing me
I can't count all those times you've hurt (me)
Sure I've loved and love this heart you bear
But it's time to forget, what isn't there
I'm moving on and done

Chorus

(Bridge)
With these words that hold a long goodbye
A hard goodbye, a kiss to press to the end of that road to the sky
And in the cut of this morning day and night
With your eyes shut tight, I wish the best to the rest of those men who try

Dear don't cry, not tonight
Me leaving you was the best decision I could've made
X2

(Outro)
Burn in hell
Burn in hell
Burn in hell
Haha, bitch you ain't laughing now
X2

Well, that's it, hope you like it.
I'll comment on what I think of any lyrics.
Just thanks for even looking!
Haha, have a great day.
My Gear:
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Guitars:
Gibson Explorer, Worn Cherry-

Amps:
Fender Roc Pro 1000 - 1 x 12 Combo, 100 watts, Hybrid


Effects:
Blues Driver Keeley Modded
#2
what? amatuer style dude...

hehe peace

its like a dark asshole with bits of poo in it
#3
Okay, thanks.
My Gear:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Guitars:
Gibson Explorer, Worn Cherry-

Amps:
Fender Roc Pro 1000 - 1 x 12 Combo, 100 watts, Hybrid


Effects:
Blues Driver Keeley Modded
#4
oohh but i think the short rockish breakdown part is nice
#5
Haha, okay...thank you again. Have anything you'd like me to critique by you?
My Gear:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Guitars:
Gibson Explorer, Worn Cherry-

Amps:
Fender Roc Pro 1000 - 1 x 12 Combo, 100 watts, Hybrid


Effects:
Blues Driver Keeley Modded
#7
Okay, will do.
Thanks again.
My Gear:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Guitars:
Gibson Explorer, Worn Cherry-

Amps:
Fender Roc Pro 1000 - 1 x 12 Combo, 100 watts, Hybrid


Effects:
Blues Driver Keeley Modded