#1
Suffocation

I avoided complex rhyme schemes in favor for pretty simple ones, before that gets pointed out. The first chunk is clean vocals, lots of solos etc. When it hits ending, it goes to growling for the rest of the song. I guess you could think of the song as a cross between prog and melodic death.

Crit for crit, hope you enjoy!

Verse
Lie
My mistakes have lead right back to me
Spelled it out but it’s still hard to see
At times it’s like I can’t breathe
Can’t breathe

Chorus
Walls are closing in
Death comes, asphyxiation
I know this feeling
Its suffocation

Verse
Choke
Been betrayed by doubt and jealousy
Lies in your head, my back to the wall
Your lack of faith will kill me
Kill me

Chorus
Walls are closing in
Death comes, asphyxiation
I know this feeling
Its suffocation

Break
I can’t accept apologies
My ears are deaf and they mean nothing to me
No matter how sincere, they all seem like lies
Can’t believe, and I won’t try
I won’t try
The anger flows, and my heart locks
Breathe in, my lungs stop
Shut you out, you can’t persist
Because I won’t keep living like this

Verse
Lie
Throat closing, I feel like I’m choking
Can’t you see the pain betrayal brings?
Light fading, now I can’t breathe
Can’t breathe


Ending-
You know the boy but not the man
Something that you can’t understand

Suffocation can not bring me down
Not in this life, not now
Accusations can not bring me down
Not in this life, not now

Say goodbye to me, I am gone
I know this feeling… suffocation
SUFFOCATION!